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As i stare into your big deep eyes
All i see are a million lies
That which i dont know to beleive
Because you brought me relief
I gave everything i had, i loved everything that you gave back
This pain is unbearable for me
This is just me suffering
I lay all day in the pain
I will never forget our rain
The fucking feeling is deep as hell
I sit here crushed while you get well
I lay here broken as you dance around
Im forgotten without a sound
©2008-2010 ~pyrojoe105
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:iconmiz-angelic:
I effing loved it!
Completly and if this is who I think its about, maybe you should have her read it, than be like I'm done with you.
Just a thought.
:iconreavik:
Once again, good job. However, when you do poetry, try to leave the swear words out. It takes away from the overall granduer.

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"Dear God, the only thing I ask of you is to hold her when I'm not around, when I'm much too far away..." - Avenged Sevenfold
:iconpyrojoe105:
i was very very unhappy when writing it ^^"

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"The question is not how far we are going to take it... the question is, do you possess the constitution to go as far as needed?"
:iconpyrojoe105:
hehe its a good thought. But no point in going back to the past to get a point across. I figured it can be portrayed as a song also (if it was longer) so fuck kinda goes with it. Then again it can take away the essence of poetry as well. Everyday i grow more and more "done" with her btw so :) im doin ok.

thanks for the comment! glad you liked it :)

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"The question is not how far we are going to take it... the question is, do you possess the constitution to go as far as needed?"
:iconreavik:
Understandable, it just makes it much more elegant and refined when you can express those emotions without the use of cursing.

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"Dear God, the only thing I ask of you is to hold her when I'm not around, when I'm much too far away..." - Avenged Sevenfold
:iconpyrojoe105:
I do agree, but if anyone wants to see this as song lyrics it could fit. But yes, no cursing = more elegant and refined. Ty =D

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"The question is not how far we are going to take it... the question is, do you possess the constitution to go as far as needed?"
:iconpyrojoe105:
I do agree, but if anyone wants to see this as song lyrics it could fit. But yes, no cursing = more elegant and refined. Ty =D

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"The question is not how far we are going to take it... the question is, do you possess the constitution to go as far as needed?"
:iconreavik:
Yw^^

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"Dear God, the only thing I ask of you is to hold her when I'm not around, when I'm much too far away..." - Avenged Sevenfold
:iconpyrojoe105:
yay for another person to comment my stuff :D!

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"The question is not how far we are going to take it... the question is, do you possess the constitution to go as far as needed?"

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